Talk:Hod Stuart/GA1

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Reviewer: Harrias ^talk 10:24, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

I think it would be worth mentioning somewhere here that he is known as 'Hod', I've seen it most commonly in the following two fashions:

William Hodgson "Hod" Stuart (February...
William Hodgson Stuart, known as Hod Stuart (February...

With his brother Bruce, Stuart would play... – I'm not keen on the use of future tense here, rather than 'would play' I'd prefer to see 'played'.
...his brother Bruce would be inducted in 1961. – Again, I'd rather you changed 'would be' to 'was'.

Both of these taken care of.
Personal life

Is the term 'rugby' regularly applied to canadian football? It certainly isn't suggested as a name for it in the lead of canadian football. As a Brit, it confused me that in your lead you call it a football club, but then state he plays rugby for them, and on clicking on it, find out it is a canadian football club. Could you make this clearer please.

That stems from both the confusing nature of the formation of Canadian football, and my lack of understanding of that time. Looking at my sources, it seems he only played football with the team, so all references were changed to that

Playing career

Is coverpoint different or the same as point? Could you link or clarify this.

Typo, should have said point

Per WP:DATESNO, don't put a date in between a month and a year, like you've done on a couple of occasions (ie In December, 1906..).

Think I caught all of these

Does reference 9 cover the whole paragraph, or just the final statement?

It was, but I added a second reference to it

Could you link opponent clubs such as Michigan Soo and Ottawa Senators on first usage?

Done

...giving the Cup back to the Wanderers. – As far as I can tell, you don't mention the Wanderers having had the cup before; so this phrase seems slightly out of place in the article. Perhaps worth adding earlier that they held it, or rephrasing this sentence.

Modified a whole bunch of stuff to make it fit, and clarify what happened. Should all be good now

Stuart would be joined in the Hall of Fame by his brother Bruce in 1961. – As in the lead; possible rephrase this to Stuart was later joined in...

Don

All-Star Game

Per WP:MOSTITLE, this should be titled "All-star game" I think. Or at least "All-Star game".

Changed

...host an all-star game, the first all-star game to be played in any sport. – Not keen on the repitition of 'all-star game' here, maybe try ...host an all-star game, the match of its kind to be played in any sport. Or something similar?

Done

The event, featured the... – No need for the comma there.

Done

former team, play against... – Should be 'playing', not 'play'.

Done

...though the All-Stars played better in the second half, though the Wanderers won by a score of 10–7. Could you change one of the 'though's to something else to avoid the repitition?

Done

Links

According to Dablinks, the article links to three dab pages; Ernie Johnson, Frank Patrick, Winger.

Done
Images

I would like to see alt text for the images, per WP:ALT.

Done

Nice article on the whole, the issues I've picked up are just minor copy-edit type changes, and as soon as they are sorted I'll be happy to pass the article. Harrias ^talk 17:06, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

All concerns addressed. thanks for the review. Kaiser matias (talk) 01:31, 7 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good, it's a pass from me. Harrias ^talk 08:00, 7 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]